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addiebell2
  1. 100 random questions
    25th Jul 2009 15:35
    15 years, 5 months & 2 days ago
  2. when the song ends
    5th Jun 2009 12:23
    15 years, 6 months & 21 days ago
  3. chapter 2
    29th Mar 2009 12:34
    15 years, 8 months & 28 days ago
  4. Chapter 1
    28th Mar 2009 21:24
    15 years, 8 months & 29 days ago
  5. post if you know someone who died of cancer
    30th Jan 2009 17:17
    15 years, 10 months & 25 days ago
  6. who am i
    27th Jan 2009 12:21
    15 years, 10 months & 28 days ago
Chapter 1
15 years, 8 months & 29 days ago
28th Mar 2009 21:24

This is a first draft so its not perfect so GET OVER IT!!!

Where was I ? All i could feel is the cool floor underneath me, no it was a table because my arm just fell off the side. All a could remeber was pain in my chest. Ow, it hurt to breath.
Suddenly I remembered misson green. I had been caught, my cover was blown. I remebered being cornered by them all sides. One pointed a gun at me, i saw the glint of metal has he drew it out. He aimed so quickly I had no time to act. He fired with deadly aim. It had Hit me in the heart, it had been leatal. I new it had happen i had heard the crack as it hit me, the pain as the leathal bullet hit bone. How was I alive? This didnt make since. Then I knew they had saved me, I didnt know how or why but they did. What did they want my secrets, my knowleage? How much more whould i suffer ?


Thank you for reading please comment maybe i wright more

iluvmymommy222
spooky, interesting. your a good writer
115 years & 6 months ago 26th Jun 2009 13:26
 
Interesting!
It would be better if you revised it, editing the grammar/spelling mistakes.
115 years, 6 months & 6 days ago 20th Jun 2009 12:38
 



I EDITED IT, NICE THOUGH.






Where was I ? All i could feel is the cool floor underneath me, no it was a table, because my cold, pale arm just fell off the thick metal corner. All a could remeber was pain shooting through my spine and ribs. Ow, it was painful to even inhale.
Suddenly I remembered mission green. I had been caught, my cover was blown. I remebered being cornered by them, all sides. One pointed a pistol at me, i saw the glint of silver and bronze metal has he drew it out. He aimed so quickly I had no time to act. He fired with a lethal, and paralell aim. It had Hit me in the left of my third rib, it had been extreamly leathal indeed. I new it had happened, I had heard the crack as it hit me, the pain as the cold bullet hit bone. How was I alive? This didnt make sense. Then I knew they had saved me, I didnt know how, or why, but they did. What did they want? My serets, my knowledge? How much more whould i suffer?
115 years, 6 months & 15 days ago 11th Jun 2009 17:27
 
This is very interesting, will there be more?
115 years, 8 months & 26 days ago 31st Mar 2009 16:46
 
  1. 100 random questions
    25th Jul 2009 15:35
    15 years, 5 months & 2 days ago
  2. when the song ends
    5th Jun 2009 12:23
    15 years, 6 months & 21 days ago
  3. chapter 2
    29th Mar 2009 12:34
    15 years, 8 months & 28 days ago
  4. Chapter 1
    28th Mar 2009 21:24
    15 years, 8 months & 29 days ago
  5. post if you know someone who died of cancer
    30th Jan 2009 17:17
    15 years, 10 months & 25 days ago
  6. who am i
    27th Jan 2009 12:21
    15 years, 10 months & 28 days ago